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There you went to give me life
And said it was a gift of course
But this gift is a little rough
Okay, to be honest, it's a curse

I was the one that you bestowed this upon
Myself and nobody else

Never did you once seem to think
How this might affect me

Asked by myself every morning
Why it is I'm here today

To only be answered by my thoughts
That you gave me the gift, why should I take it away?

Be a good sport and accept it
Use it in every which way

Alive and well is the goal
But you only gave me the life
I remember a friend told me this once. And it's stuck in my head ever since. Here's a poem for you about the feelings behind it.
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Life can be difficult but it's never a curse. I like the perspective of the poem though.
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CorSecAgent Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It's interesting how you used 'curse' and 'course' together in the first part. It's like you went "we're rhyming, we're rhyming...yeah, not so much"... LOL

Still it's good disconnect, stylistically.
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LittleWolfDreamer Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :) And actually, if you look at the first word of each stanza after the first you notice it actually says the title.
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CorSecAgent Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I did not notice. Kinda clever...
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